Cold and Windy WRECK OF THE NEBULA DREAM Weekend Writing Warriors

WeWriWa buttonA fun way to sample new books and find new writers! Here’s the link to the Weekend Writing Warriors central page, so you can visit all the participants sharing excerpts today…

The luxury ship Nebula Dream has suffered a middle of the night catastrophe in space. My hero, Nick Jameson, has fought his way to the nearest lifeboat and found chaos.As he’s just about finished loading the lifeboat, businesswoman Mara Lyrae arrives, much to his relief. But she refuses to get on the lifeboat, as there are children in need of rescuing…after a brief argument, Nick sends the lifeboat on its way. He and Mara set out to rescue the children, accompanied by Khevan, a D’nvannae Brother (think bodyguard/assassin sworn to serve an alien goddess).

This snippet is after they’ve reached the family’s cabin and discovered a growing hull breach. Nick and Khevan have cleared a tunnel through the debris trapping the children, and Nick has crawled through. I’ve done a LOT of creative punctuation and some editing. This follows directly after last week’s excerpt, when Paolo asked if the wall was going to break:

Nick tried to be reassuring, “We’ll be long gone first – now, can you help me get your sister –”

“Her name’s Gianna,” the boy pushed his sister closer to Nick.

“Help me get Gianna to crawl out through all the mess to my friends? We’ve made a tunnel for you – she’ll have to leave her toy, though.”

The girl hugged the bear tightly and shook her head, trying to retreat from her brother and Nick. “Won’t,” she informed Nick, taking her thumb out of her mouth briefly.

“Sweetheart, we have to go – it’s going to get pretty windy and cold in here soon,” with an effort, Nick kept his voice level and calm.

“Carry me,” She raised her arms to him, the bear dangling in one grubby hand.

Wreck-of-the-Nebula-DreamFinalMedThe Story
Traveling unexpectedly aboard the luxury liner Nebula Dream on its maiden voyage across the galaxy, Sectors Special Forces Captain Nick Jameson is ready for ten relaxing days, and hoping to forget his last disastrous mission behind enemy lines. He figures he’ll gamble at the casino, take in the shows, maybe even have a shipboard fling with Mara Lyrae, the beautiful but reserved businesswoman he meets.

All his plans vaporize when the ship suffers a wreck of  Titanic proportions. Captain and crew abandon ship, leaving the 8000 passengers stranded without enough lifeboats and drifting unarmed in enemy territory. Aided by Mara, Nick must find a way off the doomed ship for himself and several other innocent people before deadly enemy forces reach them or the ship’s malfunctioning engines finish ticking down to self destruction.

But can Nick conquer the demons from his past that tell him he’ll fail these innocent people just as he failed to save his Special Forces team? Will he outpace his own doubts to win this vital race against time?

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32 comments on “Cold and Windy WRECK OF THE NEBULA DREAM Weekend Writing Warriors

  1. Thanks for all the comments! Yes, the bear is very key here LOL. He even has a name…I’ll keep going with this scene until we reach a good stopping point…not a cliffhanger, I promise!

  2. I wouldn’t give up my bear for anything, not when it brings me more comfort than the strangers around me. Great snippet, Veronica. 🙂

  3. Haha if it were my male lead in this same situation: they come piling into the main deck, safe and sound, a little girl screaming in his arms. Myra asked “is she hurt?”. Roger shook his head. “Teddy didn’t make it.”

    Jokes aside, this plot sounds really cool, lots of high stakes and a character that’s a little bit broken. He’s going to have to man-up and have a cup of concrete though. Good eight!

  4. Omigosh, I am on the edge of my seat here worrying about how this is all going to turn out. Great tension, really tugs at the emotions.

  5. This is absolutely perfect, Veronica. There’s not a child of that age in any given universe who can’t instinctively calculate the most effective moment to lift those little arms and demand to be picked up.

    And you’ve captured that beautifully. 😀

  6. She’s a little young to really understand the situation, I guess. Maybe she could stuff the bear in the back of her shirt or something, and still crawl through? She should fit, if an adult will.

  7. So cute and so depressing at the same time. I’ll feel so bad if Gianna has to lose her bear, probably her comfort toy. I loved the dialogue.

    Keep smiling,
    Yawatta

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