Exactly Like An Adventure Holo WRECK OF THE NEBULA DREAM Weekend Writing Warriors

WeWriWa buttonA fun way to sample new books and find new writers! Here’s the link to the Weekend Writing Warriors central page, so you can visit all the participants sharing excerpts today…

The luxury ship Nebula Dream has suffered a middle of the night catastrophe in space. My hero, Nick Jameson, has fought his way to the nearest lifeboat and found chaos. Some creative editing and punctuation has occurred. As he’s just about finished loading the lifeboat, businesswoman Mara Lyrae arrives, much to his relief. But she refuses to get on the lifeboat, as there are children in need of rescuing…after a brief argument, Nick sends the lifeboat on its way. He and Mara set out to rescue the children, accompanied by Khevan, a D’nvannae Brother (think bodyguard/assassin sworn to serve an alien goddess).

This snippet is after they’ve reached the family’s cabin and discovered a growing hull breach. Nick and Khevan are working to clear a path through the debris trapping the children while Mara holds an emergency light on the area and tries to keep the children calm. Paolo, the 8 year old, is speaking.

“Did you – did you see my dad anywhere?”

Mara sighed. Taking a deep breath, she answered cheerful­ly, even while making a sad-faced grimace to Nick. “No, sweetheart, I didn’t find him, but I’ve got the next best thing out here – a Special Forces captain and a D’nvannae Brother. Exactly like in an adventure holo –  they came for you and Gianna.”

“And Mommy.” The boy’s voice wavered.

Hand to her mouth, Mara nodded, “Yes, they’re here to help your mother, too.”

The Story
Traveling unexpectedly aboard the luxury liner Nebula Dream on its maiden voyage across the galaxy, Sectors Special Forces Captain Nick Jameson is ready for ten relaxing days, and hoping to forget his last disastrous mission behind enemy lines. He figures he’ll gamble at the casino, take in the shows, maybe even have a shipboard fling with Mara Lyrae, the beautiful but reserved businesswoman he meets.

All his plans vaporize when the ship suffers a wreck of  Titanic proportions. Captain and crew abandon ship, leaving the 8000 passengers stranded without enough lifeboats and drifting unarmed in enemy territory. Aided by Mara, Nick must find a way off the doomed ship for himself and several other innocent people before deadly enemy forces reach them or the ship’s malfunctioning engines finish ticking down to self destruction.

But can Nick conquer the demons from his past that tell him he’ll fail these innocent people just as he failed to save his Special Forces team? Will he outpace his own doubts to win this vital race against time?

34 comments on “Exactly Like An Adventure Holo WRECK OF THE NEBULA DREAM Weekend Writing Warriors

  1. Oh wow. Lots of emotion packed in that one. How do you not let on to a child what is really happening? Well done Veronica.

  2. This sounds so dire, it sounds as if the mother is beyond help and who knows what happened to the father in all of the chaos… Very emotional and gut-wrenching. Well done.

  3. Well, I was worried last week, and guess what? I’m still worried! 🙂 I have a feeling the little one already knows what’s going on with Mommy. Poor little thing. Great eight, as usual!

  4. Hugs to everyone (and their children as the case may be)! I appreciate the comments…my toughest critic to date, I think, was an 8 year old boy, whose Mother read him the book, properly abridged for his age, and he said I got Paolo exactly right and also promptly went off and started writing his own space adventure! I took both of those as high compliments 🙂 Well, this book was based on Titanic so I tried to include all the elements, including separated family members and children who needed to be rescued. As I’ve said before, Paolo and Gianna are my heartfelt tribute to the lost 3rd Class children on Titanic.

  5. such a hard moment. The kids are scared and don’t understand what is happening. It’s hard to lie to them about their parents, but in the current situation, they need reassurance more than the truth.

  6. Oh so sad! They tried to distract the little boy with the promise of a new toy, but he can only worry about his mother. I feel for him. Good description on the facial expressions.

    Keep smiling,

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