Weekend Writing Warriors Is Tiya the Right Person?

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Continuing on with WARRIOR OF THE NILE, to be released on September 16th, the goddess Nephthys has appeared to Khenet, Lady Tiya and the high priest. After a few preliminaries (including her answer to Khenet when he refused to kneel), she’s deciding whether Tiya is the right candidate for the mission. (Some creative editing and punctuation has occured LOL):

Smiling, Nephthys nodded, her unearthly beauty cold in the stark light as she said, “So far, acceptable.  Now the true test – I must hide myself in your form.”

Eyes wide, Tiya recoiled a step, the priest standing up unbidden to offer a steadying hand. Whatever she’d expected, this clearly wasn’t part of it. Khenet sympathized – he’d found the concept appalling when Pharaoh had explained it earlier. I need to watch this closely. If the goddess can become Tiya, I need to know the signs so I’m not taken unaware on the journey.

One minute Nephthys was there, towering over the humans in the chamber, the next minute there was a swath of sparkling black mist where she’d been, the motes drifting in a lazy cloud to surround Tiya. 

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I’m thinking next week I should jump ahead a bit, let Tiya say something! so far the excerpts have been all Pharaoh, Khenet and Nephthys.

And the blurb for WARRIOR OF THE NILE:

Egypt, 1500 BCE

Lady Tiya is bound to the service of the goddess Nephthys, who plans to sacrifice Tiya’s body to protect Egypt from an ancient terror. She embarks to meet her grim fate alone but for the hardened warrior Khenet, who is fated to die at her side. Tiya’s dreams of love and family now seem impossible, and Khenet, who is the last of his line, knows his culture will die with him. Struggling with the high cost of Nephthys’s demands, both resolve to remain loyal.

Neither expects the passion that flowers when Tiya’s quiet courage and ethereal beauty meet Khenet’s firm strength and resolve. On a boat down the Nile, their two lonely souls find in each other a reason to live. But time is short and trust elusive.

Without the willing sacrifice of Tiya and Khenet, a great evil will return to Egypt. How could the gods demand their deaths when they’ve only just begun to live?

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33 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors Is Tiya the Right Person?

  1. Agreed, this is so clear the scene just unfolds effortlessly. It helps me get absorbed in the characters that much easier, and your characters don’t disappoint.

  2. I’d love to hear from Tiya next week! Great excerpt, Veronica! I love the mystery and magicality of the scene. Yes, I just made up that word but I kinda like it. 😉

  3. I agree with Cara, but having read your work, I know that’s how you roll. LOL… Great snippet. Can’t wait to read it.

  4. Oh no! I can’t remember, did Tiya understand this was part of the plan? She knew she was willing to die, that the journey was going to be difficult, but allowing Nephtys to snatch and inhabit her body? I really hope Tiya is able to make it! This is very intense – thanks, Veronica! 🙂

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