Weekend Writing Warriors DELETED Scene from WRECK OF THE NEBULA DREAM

better wewriwaOnly this week and next week to continue with excerpts from my SFR novel WRECK OF THE NEBULA DREAM, loosely based on the Titanic sinking in 1912. In deference to the WeWrWa peeps who’ve read my book and are still kindly commenting, I’m doing my #8Sunday sentences today from a deleted scene so you’ll have something NEW to read. (Since I always do a Happily Ever After ending, it’s not too much of a spoiler to say they do get rescued….eventually….is it?) This scene takes place on the Sectors battleship Andromeda, after Nick has given his formal report to the Admiral and has been released to seek medical attention. He goes to sickbay but refuses treatment until he’s seen Mara.

 She lay sound asleep on the hospital bed, hair tousled on the pillow, silken strands drying after a recent shampooing. He felt three times as grimy and in need of a shower as he had before, standing here with her. She slept easily, her face calm, peaceful, which he was relieved to see. I’m going to have enough nightmares for both of us, at least I’ve been trained for dealing with the horrors we saw. She’s pretty tough though.

Standing beside the bed, he murmured her name, not wanting to wake her, but hoping she would know on some subconscious level that he’d come as promised, as soon as possible.

Stirring just a little at the sound of his quiet voice, Mara didn’t open her eyes.

Bending over, he kissed her cheek, acutely conscious that he was going to be interrupted any second by the impatient doctor.

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WRECK OF THE NEBULA DREAM, a 2013 SFR Galaxy Award winner,  is available for kindle, as an audio book or a paperback at Amazon. The audio sample is here.

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57 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors DELETED Scene from WRECK OF THE NEBULA DREAM

  1. Touching and vulnerable on his part. I love scenes where one character is observing the other unawares. You can catch an interesting glimpse of their emotions and personality.

    • The book originally had two more chapters at the end (and a prolog!), including the time on the Admiral’s ship which today’s excerpt comes from, but it was too much, really slowed the pacing down…so I went with one shortened final chapter instead.

  2. Aww, what a touching scene. I’m sorry it’s an outtake, but I know not every scene can make the cut. Excellent work, as always! 🙂

  3. Thanks for sharing a deleted scene, wish more writers would do that 🙂 I like how tender he is here; I don’t know if he’d let his guard down like that if she was awake, but the scene shows a wonderful side of him. Nicely done.

    • I had two more chapters at the end of the book, which was just too much, coming after the basic adventure was finished. Tried to make the story a bit more crisp for publication by combining the two chapters into a shorter single chapter. Maybe someday if I do a sequel that is more Nick and Mara. Hmm, they could always be in another disaster, like the Titanic stewardess Violet Jessup who actually was on 2 different ships that sank and one that was in a ship to ship collision!

  4. Like everyone else, I felt that this was a very touching moment. I also like that we got in his head for such an intimate moment. Makes it very really and very relatable.

  5. Thanks everyone for stopping by and commenting! I really do appreciate the support…next week is going to be the last excerpt from this book…just for a sense of completion since Sunday the 14th will be the 101st anniversary of Titanic striking the iceberg.

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