Six Sentence Sunday – Science Fiction Adventure Continues

Going back to my SFR , out on submission now, set in the same universe as my recently published WRECK of the NEBULA DREAM. Andrianda (Andi) Markriss, a planetary representative for Loxton Galactic Trading, has been spending a lazy summer with her best friend in the highly exclusive summer compound of the planet Zulaire’s ruling nobility, networking. On a day when a number of strange  and disturbing things have already happened, Captain Tom Deverane, Sectors Special Forces, unexpectedly shows up with a troop of soldiers and demands she leave with him. Immediately.

Andi doesn’t take this very well….in fact, she refuses to go. Later in the evening, all hell has broken loose, as the captain predicted.
Trying to avoid spoilers here, after certain “events”, she and the soldiers are on the run. Just now the scouts have reported a party of civilians in trouble ahead. Andi impulsively urges Deverane to rescue them. Here’s his answer:

“I thought I told you—more than once—my primary orders don’t allow me the discretion to go around the countryside rescuing everyone in distress.”  Spacing out each word for emphasis, he said, “I have to get back to the capital. We’ve got vital information that could stop the entire planet from descending into war so I can’t conduct fire fights and rescue individuals. You were an exception because someone somewhere pulled a lot of rank to get special orders issued,okay?”

Biting her lip, Andi flushed and jerked her elbow away from him. I wish he wouldn’t keep rubbing it in my face that I got special treatment – I didn’t ask for him to come rescue me.

(What do you think, after a few weeks of reading this in snippets – will Deverane find a way to justify attempting a rescue?)

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37 comments on “Six Sentence Sunday – Science Fiction Adventure Continues

  1. LOL….well, THAT was certainly not the answer she wanted. Not sure who’s more ticked off, her for being told that, again, or him for having to be frank and honest. If there’s any connection being established…he may have just lost it. Great six!

  2. Oh, I absolutely think he’s her hero–and he no doubt WILL rescue more people in distress than just his “charge”. I love your hero!! Great six. =D

  3. I love this story and the snippets are such enticing glimpses into their personalities. I think Deverance is a bit more…roguish and a bigger hero than he gives himself credit for. Definitely look forward to stopping by here each week!

    I have to vote with @Kate Warren, too. I think she’ll take it upon herself and he’ll have to divert to save them all and grouse the entire way, but yeah. That’s what feisty heroines are for, right? 😆

  4. KE, Lisa, Kate & Silver, REALLY appreciate the comments…you guys certainly have tapped into the dynamic between Andi and Deverane – so glad you’re finding this trip enjoyable! Thanks!

  5. Lots of friction between these two. Neither of them is in a happy position, and that makes for a good read!

  6. First, thank you so much for the lovely comment you left on my blog. 🙂
    I really enjoyed this six. very telling and I learned a lot about Andi just in this short time.

  7. What Sidney said. There’s more to this rescue than meets the eye. Now it remains to be seen whether Deverane follows his orders or jeopardises the mission to humour her. Interesting situation.

  8. Thanks, everyone for the comments – glad the scene works and I managed to create tension! For everyone LOL! Oh yes indeed, there’s more to the rescue – both rescues…!

  9. Ouch. He probably wishes he could help them too. Didn’t he say he wanted to help in one of your earlier posts, and that’s why he’s doing what he’s doing? Frustrating situation for them both. I wonder if she’ll let him keep his eye on the big picture.

  10. Great tension building in his dilemma and the struggle with Andi! Excellent conflict between the urge to do what he thinks is morally right and his pragmatism. Also a really nice touch in having Andi uncomfortable with getting special treatment. Great six, Veronica!!

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